55 Fiction: Free


The kite flew up in the sky, but it was tied to the ground with that bit of string. The gust of wind wasn't enough to take it wherever it wanted to go.

And then, the string snapped. The kite was free, to catch the breeze and fly where it wanted to go.

It smiled.


 

What is 55 Fiction? It is a fiction story, with all the basic elements of a narrative (plot, characters, setting, conflict), in 55 words or less (A non-negotiable rule).

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34 comments :: 55 Fiction: Free

  1. Quite unusual stuff! Liked it :-)
    Yet another inspiration for me to do a 55Fiction!

  2. @ akanksha... Thanks a lot, and would love to see a 55 fiction from your end. Cheers, keep writing...

  3. Nice !!

    Btw how do you know that your kite is a male ? he he....You are making it too obvious. :P

    cheers. :)

  4. hey same quest..how do u knw kite is male..
    probably your kite is male...
    hehehahha....:)

    same like wen u let brid fly from cage

    i m trying to write 55 fiction but, always fails
    hope one day i will....

  5. sweet! I am smiling too.. :) n wish v were kites too...

  6. @ bondgal... Like I've said before, this is what happens when you don't have someone to proofread the stuff you write :D Thanks a ton for pointing it out, edited it... I didn't mean to make the post even remotely gender specific :)

    Cheers...

  7. @ Pallav... I really didn't expect such a lot of discussion about the gender of the kite! On my part, it was an honest mistake, so thanks a lot for pointing it out to me... hope it's fine now :) cheers, and give 55 fiction a shot yourself, it's not that tough. Keep writing...

  8. @ Anupriya... Really? Made out of flimsy paper, and a thin wooden frame, that's your fantasy there?? :D Kiddin'... it must be quite a view from up there, the sense of freedom that comes with it when you're one with the wind.

    Nice to see you here after quite a long time now. Cheers...

  9. loved it!!
    i can relate myself to the kite:)

  10. lovely FFF dude... sometimes its good when that line snaps isnt it?

    have a nice day mate... cheers...

  11. A beautiful metaphor there! Liked it! Sticking to that rule must be one hard thing...kudos! :)

  12. @ blue eyed soul... Thanks for dropping by, and it's always great when people can relate to the stuff I write :) Cheers...

  13. @ Arv... It really is nice when sometimes that line snaps, when you have those precious few moments of floating back to the ground, without restrictions of where you can fly, and how high you should go... even if it doesn't last forever, it's good to have that feeling for even that little time.

    Thanks for dropping by, cheers...

  14. @ Tara... 55 fictions are more fun than tough, so that's one amazing thing about them. And it's even more fun to write metaphorically, and this is the end result of it all :) thanks for dropping by and commenting, cheers...

  15. No strings attached :).
    And then see, how things fly.

  16. wowwwww........ its superb.

    i hvnt written a 55F for long now :(

    arnab plz do visit my blog as i hv an award for u. wud b glad if u accpt it.

    take care :)

  17. hey hey hey... i was jst kiddng...
    it doesnot matter to me ..
    u r writer it depends upon u, ur take.. how u wanna write...

    ya i will i knw its not tht tough but the i hv to be very selective for words, which can express my emotions within 55 words...
    thank u for motivating me...

  18. nice one:)I wonder how you manage with just 55 words!!!I think I would also like to give it a try someimte:)

  19. Loved the abstractness of it all. Freedom, we all yearn for it, don't we? But it comes at a price...

    Reminds me of a post I'd written on freedom. A pretty long one, actually. (It is a transcript of my oration)

    The Price of Freedom

    Do go thru it if/when you have the time...

    Trust all is well, otherwise.

    Peace.

  20. @ Brown Phantom... It's the best way to be, no strings attached. You can truly taste the freedom, for however little time it might be...

  21. @ Preetilata... Thanks a lot for that award, although I haven't had the time to visit any blogs recently, 'coz of the exams going on right now... will surely visit it once the exams get over. :D

  22. @ Pallav... :) I really meant what I said though, it's good that you pointed that out for me. And do give 55 fiction a shot, I've always said it's damn addictive!

  23. @ Kunjal... Thanks a lot, and you should give it a shot sometime, it's awesome fun!

  24. @ Kartz... Would surely visit your blog sometime, although right now might not be all that possible. Have my exams on these days, which is very sad... Freedom is a lot like the horizon that we aim for always... thanks for visiting...

  25. sooooooo beautiful!!!!!!!!!!

    i wanna be the kite too...
    but the tornado knocked me over! :O

  26. Decent, I guess there need to be two characters though.

    Anyways well thought of.

  27. The piks lovely!
    The story made me smile :D

  28. @ harini... Welcome back! Been a while since I saw you here... thanks for reading.

    The tornado can't be strong enough to keep you down always... think about it :)

  29. @ Careless Thinker.. Thanks for reading. I somehow like writing metaphorical stuff, and am inclined a little bit to the abstract as well, probably that's why the characters and not that clearly defined...

    Thanks for your inputs though... Cheers :)

  30. @ Cursed... I liked the pic the moment I saw it. Had to use it for this one, made me smile a lot, thinking about the times when I used to fly the kite on the roof, all day long... and the countless kites I've lost coz of the kite fights :)

    Thanks for reading, keep writing...
    Cheers...

  31. liked it... different from all the 55 fiction i've read so far...

  32. @ Swayam... I hope the difference wasn't bad ;) Glad you liked it. Welcome to Technicolor Collage, keep reading...

    Cheers...

  33. made me smile.... :)

  34. @ Diva... :) Felt good to hear that.

    Cheers...